Deviant Nation : Model : Adahlia

Name: Adahlia

Country: United States

Member Since: December 1, 2005

Number of Posts: 221

Gender: F

Zodiac Sign: Leo

Sexual Preference: Boys & Girls

About Me: booze. bruises. bikes. bitches.

my tattoo wizards: Yutaro Sakai : AWR : San Francisco, CA
Jason McAffee : Temple Tattoo : Oakland, CA
Khaljan Bedrose : Electric Oni : Petaluma, CA
Devon Blood : Electric Oni : Petaluma, CA
Matt Howse : Spider Murphy's : San Rafael, CA
Mark Kross : Sacred Tattoo : Oakland, CA
Dave Lang : Lit Fuse Tattoo : Olympia, WA

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booky goodness: Any and all Christopher Moore. David Sedaris. Francesca Lia Block. The NY times crossword puzzles (only the easy days for me). Carl Hiaasen. W.S.B.

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stab stab stab: bros. bromance. bro-asis. bro-dozers. brotus. your 'sick' tribal armband from 1992. people who wear sunglasses at night.

Pays The Bills: cute ladies putting cute toys in my butt. Plus being a mean esspresso slinger.

Posted: 11/13/08 at 02:21 AM

Need some feedback

So I started on my comic book. I am posting some rough character sketches and the first page and would love some feed back. So this is my first time drawing comics. I have never really done this style of art, especially following a sequencial story line. I was hoping y'all could look at the first page and give me some feedback. Specifically things like what do you think is going on so far, what do you think the relationship is between the two characters, can you tell what all the drawings are (especially the food plate in the third frame), if the perspective looks ok and at least semi-realistic etc. I would greatly appreciate any pointers. My scanner sucks and made it kind of blurry and cut the edges off a bit, but I think its still pretty readable. Let me know whatcha think

Posted: 11/13/08 at 02:38 PM


	it looks awesome! hehe, that so cute how much the drawing looks like you.

~~Neko~~

Adelaide, 05

20 / F - Attached

Posted: 11/13/08 at 05:25 PM


	the second page is fantastic. the lines are clear and the images work in the frames... i gotta say comic book layouts are hard to follow (at least they are for me haha) The convo in the second square is awesome. Nice work!

Tadpole

Lake Villa, IL

34 / M - Single

Posted: 11/13/08 at 06:17 PM


	They look awesome, although they're not terribly legible.

AppleJax - Model

Regina, SK

F - Other

Posted: 11/13/08 at 08:08 PM


	I like how it all sits, and what is emphasized Not very good at reading it from my end, but the look is really cool! I'll try and zoom in somehow, but not much luck so far, and I suck at computers.

~~d1sciple~~

Welly Hard

M - Single

Posted: 11/13/08 at 08:43 PM


	aha ha ha, that's pretty good man

Aries - Model

North Hollywood, CA

37 / F - Attached

Posted: 11/14/08 at 11:13 AM

I dunno.. looks like Seans stuff when he was high. Dont know what to make of it. Maybe i need to see more...What kind of pills are those??

Adahlia - Model

Olympia, WA

F - Attached

Posted: 11/14/08 at 02:31 PM


	Just all the meds I have to take for that rheumatic condition I have that is like Lupus.

Sempi

Novato, CA

44 / M - Single

Posted: 11/14/08 at 03:24 PM

So I'm now at Blue Moon Comics. Sam stated that the story line is a little disjoined and needs to be more focused. The idea is good but too wordy. Sometimes a little says a lot. Last statement we don't know what she's talking about because we have no context to put it in. Page lay out needs work. Is the first panel even necessary? You've already explained they're home by them sitting on the couch and the roof scene could be smaller because we have already been told that they will be eating and drinking a lot. For the last panel smaller him so you can fit her in lying on the floor talking to us. Focus needs to be on her not him.

Where's the tits in his thought balloon? Were men we think of sex more than anything else during the day. I'm jus sayin'.

Practice, practice, practice. You might want to pick up Eisner's Graphic Storytelling or Comics and Sequential Art. These are both invaluable books on storytelling.

Keep going and don't get discouraged.

That's Sam's assessment. If you need help acquiring the two books, let me know and I'll get them for you. I'm looking forward to more of your comic being shown here.

~~Hai~~ - Model

Portland, OR

F - Other

Posted: 11/19/08 at 02:41 PM


	I love it. It is hard to read only because it is so small on the screen. I am super fussy about the comics I read because if i am not interested in the art I lose interest, and I would definitely read your comics. I hope you finish these so I can get my hands on one. Oh, and those are totally tacos. MMMMmmm, tacos....

~~Douce~~ - Model

Santiago, 12

26 / F - Attached

Posted: 11/23/08 at 12:43 PM


	wuajajaajajaa cool!!

~~xlowlifex~~

Ione, CA

25 / M - Other

Posted: 11/24/08 at 12:10 PM


	oh how i love you

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